Journal 2

"It was a spring afternoon in West Florida.  Janie had spent most of the day under a blossoming pear tree in the back-yard.  She had been spending every minute that she could steal from her chores under that tree for the last three days.  That was to say, ever since the first tiny bloom had opened.  It had called her to come and gaze on a mystery.  From barren brown stems to glistening leaf-buds; from the leaf-buds to snowy virginity of bloom.  It stirred her tremendously.  How?  Why?  It was like a flute song forgotten in another existence and remembered again.  What?  How?  Why?  This singing she heard that had nothing to do with her ears.  The rose of the world was breathing out smell.  It followed her through all her waking moments and caressed her in her sleep.  It connected itself with other vaguely felt matters that had struck her outside observation and buried themselves in her flesh.  Now they emerged and quested about her consciousness."  [10-11]

• Repetition of question "How?", makes reader think how scene was affecting Janie.
• Repetition of question "Why?", makes reader wonder why scene is having this effect.
• Sentances are short and choppy in comparison to surrounding paragraphs.
• Use of verb "steal" implies that she is not supposed to be outside.
• Tranquil imagery developed.
• Blooming is repeated, possibly to signify character development.
• Pear tree is personified
• "Called her" implies she is being influenced.
• Words involving touch are repeated.
• B aliteration "barren brown stems" along with "buds".
• "Rose of the world", poetic language.
•  Wording having to do with nature: "snowy","blossoming".
• Use of virginity to relate to contrast in innocence from early character stage to late.
• Music theme repeated, "singing", "flute".
• "breathing out smell", nature and her senses combining.
• All throughout paragraph setting is still being devloped after describing Janie's actions.
• Idea of gentle sleep adds to relaxation tone.
• Has a good flow because of sentance structure.